Happy Monkey’s Notes
Ages again…
The age differences between the five Brillantis and Alexis remain the same.
They were aged up by 3 years because I feared the stuff they would face later would feel as if it was “way too much” for their former teenager ages, specially Chiclen and Téa. In Alexis case, it felt a bit too much for him to be so talented at such a young age. I still want him to be a young prodigy like Natasha, but making Alexis’ age closer to Natasha’s felt more realistic, and I still wanted him to be around Espinard’s age.
Damn!
I don’t know what I was thinking with this (is still something William would say)
I think this was very immature. Not hurtful, William is meant to be a horrible person.
Although in retrospect, I should have made William look meaner on the first chapter. I think the reader gets he doesn’t get along with Chiclen from the start, but Chiclen sounded meaner with the whole “your voice should be considered a violation to human rights”.
A femur for a duck
Later introduced by name, Skello Remuf was meant to be the Head Scientist of the Maten Proejct, and not Drake Dackon.
Skello probably exist in the new canon, as he is meant to be a relative of someone who will appear later on (let’s call this character “Calaca”). Calaca is a character I had trouble with deciding whether they should be a “he” or a “she” specifically, as I saw potential for Calaca as both a “bro” to another character, or as “his girlfriend”. At that moment I went for Calaca bieng a “she”, and Skello was a way to show part of that male counterpart I had planned for “Calaca’s he version”. I am still undecisive on this character’s gender and sex, and I even wonder if I can turn them into two characters to develop both sides, but that could make two lesser characters born from a better single one.
Dackon on the other hand, was originally a character from TMBD, and although he was going to appear near the end of the original Break Umbrella, I thought it made more sense for him to appear form the start, specially since the first chapters lacked Intelligus characters (animals), and I feared not showing at least one Intelligus would give new readers a wrong idea of the world (I only wish I could have added Felpas in some way prior to Garras’ first appearance).
Dackon also was meant to have somewhat of a rivalry with Espinard in TMBD, so I thought it would be better to build it up from the very beginning, if I still take that route in the future. I’m open to change the story if that could lead to a better result.
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